A Penny For Your Thoughts
There is this saying
That if you love someone, you’ll let em’ go.
I may be impatient, but this love just seems so slow.
I go crazy, thinking about you through the day.
My mind’s been running,
But my heart already, ran away.
Chorus
If you love me…
All you have to do is stay a while.
Let me just hold you.
I promise I’ll make it, worth your while.
If you don’t see me,
Just know I couldn’t stand the pain
Of knowing
That you wouldn’t be my man.
Baby, if I had a penny for your every thought I’d exchange them for your love.
I’ll cast in all my chips, and it still won’t be enough.
I’d beg you baby, with every longing plea.
But in the end I know, I have to set you free.
Oh, oh, oh, oh.
If you decide, you wanna take a chance.
Let me know that you want my sweet romance.
Come tell me honey, and I’ll be just your style.
Bring some candles, ‘cause this may take a while!
Mmm, uh, huh.
Chorus
If you love me…
All you have to do is stay a while.
Let me just hold you.
I promise I’ll make it, worth your while
If you don’t see me,
Just know I couldn’t stand the pain
Of knowing
That you wouldn’t be my man.
Hey, listen!
Did you hear my heartfelt song?
I will be waiting,
But please, don’t make me wait long!
There’s a candle burning out of control
Within this soul.
Don’t let it be taken
When that cool wind, starts to blow.
Well done. I enjoyed this.
It might improve your work even more if you would refrain from creating long sentences just to add the rhyming word. But hey, who am I?
…instead of:
There’s a candle burning out of control
Within this soul.
You could say:
The candle’s out of control
Deep within this burning soul.
Eileen Browne, thank you so much for your input. I had thought about that. My thinking was to just eliminate the “within this soul,” but your way actually sounds much better! Appreciate your feedback.
No need to change it. Put it to some music, Misty. That’s what I would do, If I were twenty years younger and still singing.
Seahand, thank you so much! I wonder sometime about my writing. This particular lyric is suppose to have sort of a blues feel to it.