Hooking Readers – Where to Open the Curtain


I once heard a senior editor at Berkley Publishing in New York claim he could almost reject a submission by how the envelope was addressed. But he admitted he read the first sentence. If it peaked any interest, he’d read that first paragraph, but if he wasn’t hooked by then, forget it.


Where you start your story, where you choose to raise the curtain is the very first most important aspect of your manuscript if you’re hoping to publish traditionally—and should be if you plan from the start to self-publish.

For my personal opinion, garnered from Lajos Egri’s THE ART OF DRAMATIC WRITING, a great place to open is with a crisis that leads to a decision or a decision that leads to a crisis. Either will propel your hero to action.

A new contemporary Christian romance ONE AND DONE I recently finished opens like this:

“Hey. Weather girl.”

Sammi Dan stopped in her tracks. Crackers, what did he want? With a million and two things to do before lunch, she sure didn’t need any distractions. She turned. Her boss stood at the end of the hall just outside his office waving a brown paper envelope in the air. Mister Yancy had hardly said four words to her in the year she’d been with KBTL.

A crisis calls our heroine to adventure. She’d worked at the television station a year—her normal surroundings according to THE HERO’S JOURNEY by Chris Vogler—and the boss barely ever spoke to her, but now, he’s calling her. Very soon, we know she’s being given the opportunity to chase a dream.

Do not start your novel with back-story. SO may writers who don’t know better do. They think they need to ‘bring the reader up to speed’, but it’s a terrible mistake. In ONE AND DONE, my reader doesn’t know Samantha Danielle yet, so who cares about her? Where she’s been, what she’s done? Who cares about her parents, Rex, or Uncle Bear? No one. Not yet.

Think about it. When you meet someone new, would you sit still to listen to their life history? No, it’s only after you get to know the person and find her interesting that you’re willing to go along on a journey with her, finding out more about her as you go.

No one opening your book and meeting your characters for the first time cares about their past. It’s great for you to know—so yes, imagine all that back-story that’s made her into the woman she is today, know it, and sprinkle it in as your story progresses and it is needed. Be sure to avoid author intrusion though. History can come out in dialogue, or introspection, but make sure it’s a story the POV character would be thinking about, because she knows it well.

Back to hooking readers, in essence, I’ve opened my curtain in ONE AND DONE in the middle of a scene, because everything else so far that busy morning has been boring and without any relation to the story, so it’s all implied. We know it’s before lunch and Sammi Dan’s been crazy busy. And that’s all we need to know at this point.

Writing creative genre fiction, there are rules, but once you know them, you can break them so long as you know why and your reason is a good one. And you’ll need an understanding editor, too. That said, for the most part, books start in the protagonist’s point of view. Because ONE AND DONE is a romance and women comprise the lion’s share of my audience, I open with my heroine. Hopefully, this novel will enjoy a crossover gender appeal due to the Texas Ranger baseball backdrop.

On the first page, Samantha is invited to travel to Mexico to get ahead of a rumor that the Rangers want to buy a pitcher’s contract from the south-of-the-border Rojos. It’s her decision that propels her on the journey. This is where your reader—or agent or editor—decides whether they want to go along.

Through Chapter One, she accepts, chooses a photographer, flies to Mexico, then meets my hero for a pre-game interview. A writer needs to end every chapter with a hook, too. Never give your reader a comfortable place to close your book. For the last three pages of my ten page chapter, I used a page break and switched to George Herman Walter Johnson’s POV. Here’s how ONE AND DONE’s first chapter ends:

“I wasn’t doing anything illegal. And I have never bet on a baseball game, not ever. Actually, I’m not even a gambler. I used to be a poker player, and now I’m a baseball player.”

“Simple as that?”

Just like a female, she wanted more than he was willing to give. “Isn’t it?”

“Okay then, why did the University of Texas kick you out of Longhorn baseball right before the College World Series?”

“They didn’t. I flunked out. Spent too much time at the hold ’em tables.”

She batted her lashes. “I see said the blind man. So where are you taking me for dinner?”

Now on the other hand, if it is necessary to put your character to bed, never do it at the end of a chapter. Always keep the reader/agent/editor turning the page. It’s such a compliment when someone tells me that I kept them up late reading my book. I love it.

Hook ‘em, reel ‘em in, land ‘em!

  1. Avatar of Paula Boer
    Paula Boer says

    “Arrive late, leave early” works for me :-).

    1. Avatar of Caryl McAdoo
      Caryl McAdoo says

      Great way to put it short and sweet, Paula! Thanks for your comment. Blessings from Texas!

  2. Avatar of Nancy Duci Denofio
    Nancy Duci Denofio says

    If I see it in a picture in my mind, and feel the action, taste it, smell it, cry, scream, or run etc., I am in the arms of the reader… Thanks so much for sharing. Sincerely, Nancy

    1. Avatar of Caryl McAdoo
      Caryl McAdoo says

      I know, I am the character I’m writing. I’m sure it’s alot like acting – playing like you’re someone else. You write screen plays? My husband took a few screenwriting at SMU. I think it’s harder, but it is shorter 🙂 Thanks for your comments Nancy. What are you working on now?

  3. Avatar of Eileen Browne
    Eileen Browne says

    Great lesson and examples.
    Thank you so much for sharing and helping us improve our skills.

    1. Avatar of Caryl McAdoo
      Caryl McAdoo says

      Eileen, it is so my pleasure to be able to ‘help’ as I was ‘helped’. I really appreciate this platform provided at Angie’s Diary! Thanks for joining and for your comment!

  4. Avatar of Andy Bachman
    Andy Bachman says

    The way ONE AND DONE’s first chapter ends, reminds me of how some quality tv episodes could end. Your examples make me aware of many similarities.
    Another fine article. Thank you.

  5. Avatar of Caryl McAdoo
    Caryl McAdoo says

    Oh I hope so, Eileen! Had it not been for my mentors at the DFW Writers’ Workshop, I probably still wouldn’t be published! And now I’m less than 8 weeks out of my first historical Christian romance VOW UNBROKEN’s debut from Howard Book, a division of Simon and Schuster. Though I have nine others published (co-authored with my husband), this is the first time from one of the BIG FIVE, and I’m very excited! Seems like it’s been a long time coming, but God’s timing is always perfect!

  6. Avatar of Caryl McAdoo
    Caryl McAdoo says

    Thank you, Andy! I believe all the ‘rules’–each made to be broken, but the writer should know it and have a good reason to break it–apply to good creative writing across the board, whether a novel, movie, television show, or cartoon! 🙂

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